my only criticism is the drums, they don't really fit

other than general mixing concerns its quite nice though

Very good, only general gripe is the mixing. Its clear, you can hear all the instruments, the vocals are a little drowned out by the song, but it clearly needs some more mixing attention. It does sound really cool though.

I think based on what I'm hearing, especially in the part at around 47 seconds in, my brain thinks we're going into speedcore. Honestly, I think you could try something very similar to this with speedcore, get some dubstep snares and bass pedals and just go nuts, I think that could sound incredible.